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     <h2>Matt Kirk is:</h2>
 
     <h3 class='blue'>Analytical:</h3>
-    <p>Data production is growing at an alarming rate.  My skill with analysis can help you become more adept with data.</p>
-    <p>I have been analytical all my life.  When I was seven, I took my parents' VCR apart.  They got upset.  They cooled off when I put it back together for them again and it worked.  When I at the University of Washington I earned both a mathematics degree and quantitative economics degree.  I started doing quantitative finance research.  My research was on the effects of volatility on tax-loss harvesting as well as momentum and reversal in emergent economies.  The initial research I did has turned into a Russell Index called CrossVol (crossvol.com).  My entire life has been analytical.</p>  
+    <p>Data production is growing at an alarming rate.  You can become adept with data with my help.</p>
+    <p>I have been analytical all my life.  When I was seven, I took my parents' VCR apart.  They got upset obviously.  They cooled off, when I put it back together and it still worked.  I earned two science degrees from the University of Washington.  After UW I started my career doing quantitative financial research.  My research was on the effects of volatility on tax-loss harvesting as well as momentum and reversal in emergent economies.  The initial research I did has turned into a Russell Index called CrossVol (crossvol.com).  I am still analytical and love it.</p>  
 
 
     <h3 class='yellow'>Focused:</h3>
-     <p>Teams need focus.  I can help a team overcome challenges by focusing on what matters, results.</p>
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-    <p>I am focused on quality.  When I was in school, I was so focused to deliver my best work, I decided to typeset all my work with LaTeX.  This took twice as long but it was the best I could do and I was focused on delivering the best work possible.  Again I am always focused on the best quality work.</p>
+    <p>Teams need focus.  I can help you overcome challenges by focusing on what matters--results.  When I was at UW, I was so focused on results, I typeset all my work with LaTeX.  This took twice as long but it was the best.  I focus on results.</p>
 
 
     <h3 class='grey'>Competitive</h3>
 
-    <p>I can help your business compete by finding advantages in your model and stimulating them.  When I was in Boy Scouts I started early so I was able to finish my Eagle Scout project before turning 14 and be one of two in the entire council to complete their award by 13.  Again when I was going to College I started two years early and was able to finish a year early with two bachelor of science degrees.  Together we can help your business compete more effectively by stimulating your advantages.</p>
+    <p>I can help your business compete by finding advantages.  When I was in Boy Scouts I started early so I was able to finish my Eagle Scout when I was 13.  Again when I was going to College I started two years early and was able to finish a year early with two bachelor of science degrees.  Together we can help your business compete more effectively.</p>
 
 
     <h3 class='green'>Pragmatic</h3>
 
-    <p>I love deliver value to my customers.  When my family owned an auto parts store, we all learned the lessons of keeping costs down, whether they be tangible or intangble so to give more room to grow and to deliver value.  Instead of focusing on every detail my entire life I focus on the results and value that people receieve.  
+    <p>I love deliver only what matters.  My family learned the lesson of being pragmatic when we owned an auto parts store.  Instead of buying too many parts, we adopted a just-in-time model to keep product flowing.  Instead of focusing on the theory I do what is nessecary to get the job done.</p>
 
     <h3 class='black'>Self-Taught</h3>
 
-    <p>We can always improve our current life with learning more.  My entire life has been filled with reading and learning from others.  When I was nine I read The C Programming language.  I didn't understand all of it but wanted to learn more about how computers worked.  I am constantly reading to learn more from others.  Together we can make amazing products and learn abundance.</p>
+    <p>We can always improve our current life with learning more.  My life has been filled with reading and learning from others.  When I was nine I read "The C Programming language".  I didn't understand all of it but wanted to learn more about how computers worked.  I am always learning from others.  Together we can improve your business by learning.</p>
 
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