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craigcook · May 8, 2012 · 490d11e · 490d11e
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@@ -27,14 +27,16 @@ <h1 id="logo"><img src="img/mdn-logo-sm.png" alt="" title="" width="62" height="
 
       <h1 class="page-title">Temporarily Offline</h1>
 
-      <p>Mozilla Developer Network will be down for maintenance and unavailable for approximately 8 hours starting 
-      <time datetime="2012-05-08T15:00:00+00:00">Tuesday, 8 May, 2012 at 15:00 UTC</time> (<time datetime="2012-05-08T17:00:00+02:00">Tue 17:00 CET</time>, 
-      <time datetime="2012-05-08T11:00:00-04:00">Tue 11:00 EDT</time>, <time datetime="2012-05-08T08:00:00-07:00">Tue 08:00 PDT</time>) 
-      &amp; finishing by <time datetime="2012-05-09T00:00:00-00:00">Wednesday, 9 May, 2012 at 00:00 UTC</time> 
-      (<time datetime="2012-05-09T02:00:00+02:00">Wed 02:00 CET</time>, <time datetime="2012-05-09T20:00:00-04:00">Tue 20:00 EDT</time>, 
-      <time datetime="2012-05-09T17:00:00-07:00">Tue 17:00 PDT</time>).</p>
+      <p>Mozilla Developer Network will be down for maintenance and completely unavailable for approximate eight hours 
+      on <time datetime="2012-05-08T15:00:00+00:00">Tuesday, May 8th, 2012, starting at 15:00 UTC</time> 
+      (<time datetime="2012-05-08T17:00:00+02:00">Tue 17:00 CET</time>, <time datetime="2012-05-08T11:00:00-04:00">Tue 11:00 US-EDT</time>, 
+      <time datetime="2012-05-08T08:00:00-07:00">Tue 8:00 US-PDT</time>). It should be back online by <time datetime="2012-05-09T00:00:00-00:00">00:00 UTC on Wednesday May 9th</time> 
+      (<time datetime="2012-05-09T02:00:00+02:00">Wed 02:00 CET</time>, <time datetime="2012-05-09T20:00:00-04:00">Tue 20:00 US-EDT</time>, 
+      <time datetime="2012-05-09T17:00:00-07:00">Tue 17:00 US-PDT</time>). 
+
+      <p>During this time, the site will not be available for viewing or editing. Don't panic &ndash; MDN will be back before you know it!</p>
 
-      <p>During this time, the site won't be available for editing or viewing. Don't panic &ndash; MDN will be back before you know it! If you are looking for alternative references during this time, you can use the following sites:</p>      
+      <p>Meanwhile, here are some alternative resources:</p>
 
       <h2>Open Web standards:</h2>
       <ul>