Typos, Grammar, Punctuation, etc.

[EnduringBeta]

Technical information

Using version:

• latest (latest release)

Running on:

• Windows

How comfortable you are with your system and/or IT in general:

• My machine is fully under my control, tell me what you need

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Problem

Below is a list of typos, questionable/opinionated punctuation, and such that I found while reading through the privacy policy and terms & conditions for a free Android/iOS app with no PII, and no third parties beyond Google Play.

• I'm an individual, Ross Llewallyn, but regularly "we", "us", and "our" are used. I'm not sure what the right answer is here.
• Periods after the effect dates might be good?
• "that you have provided to us, to provide my Service" - comma splicy? Consider "to us in order to provide"?
• "It could make your phone vulnerable to malware/viruses/malicious programs, compromise your phone’s security features, and interfere with the proper working of the XYZ app." - changed the third entry in the list to be parallel to the first two
• "Link to the ABC of third-party service providers used by the app" - add colon?
• "if you don’t have access to either Wi-Fi or any remaining data allowance." - rephrased; seemed simpler to me
• "For example, you need to make sure that your device stays charged" - instead of "i.e." with only one example that isn't in parentheses
• "the both systems(and for any additional systems" - missing space before parenthesis
• "when offered to you, We may also wish" - comma should be period
• "wish to stop providing the app, and may terminate" - remove comma which is unnecessary?

[nisrulz]

Good questions and thank you for raising them.

I have ran the generated privacy policy text through Grammarly in the past (#111). So I will review each of your question and check it individually to start a PR with fixes. From the looks of it, some are easier to fix and some are a bit ambiguous.

Once again, thanks for bringing it up. Everyone benefits from these at the end 😸

[EnduringBeta]

Thanks for taking my suggestions! Please note that some quotes are from the text followed by my comment/question, but other quotes are my attempt to correct something followed by me saying what I changed.

I'm hoping that all are pretty searchable in the code base to find where to change something if needed.