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Contribution to some H-lines of personality c00 #49

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Contribution to the H-lines of personality c00 in h/list/00_00/personality_voice_c00_03_00.

Lines translate are: 320, 332, 316, 336, 388, 392, 479, 476, 496, 500, 620, 616, 775, 778, 823, 826, 838, 835, 877, 880, 947, 950, 965, 968, 1055 and 1058.

This is the first translation I do, sorry if it's too bad, please tell me what could be improved and what sounds weird.

I have some general questions regarding most lines:
-I don't know if I should delete the // at the beginning before sending the contribution.
-イケ and イキ both refer to "cum"?
-Should we take the liberty to add ~/!/... to add more emotion and expressiveness to the lines? I refer to those cases where it's not in the original written line.
-What word do you use for おちんちん? Asking since I'm not sure which one (dick/penis/cock) is more accurate. (By the way, it's the first time I use GitHub too, is it okay to write those words here?)

And I also made some notes about specific lines:
-316: I put slowly for だんだん, I also considered step by step or little by little but it sounds too long for me, what do you think?
-388: Do you keep the "(初絶頂)" too in the translation or is it unnecessary?
-620: I'm not sure about 想い, I used "love" for the context, tell me if there is a better word.
-823: Is ジンジン a subject (throbbing) who する (rubs) inside? I interpreted it as two sensations that are happening at the same time, but the literal translation refers to the former.
-838: 私が君を= the literal translation of this is very confusing, is it "I am with You" or is it something like "Are we together"?
-835: I had a hard time phrasing this sentence because of the "?" connotation, not sure if it's grammatically correct, please check this one.
-880: I wrote "ah" to keep the っ, tell me if there is a more accurate expression.
-965: I'm not sure if "intimately" keeps the meaning of the original, what would you write instead?
-968: Here I was not sure if 敏感 was a feeling as in "it's sensitive" or if it was a subject "sensitive place", I went with the latter.

Contribution to lines: 320, 332, 316, 336, 388, 392, 479, 476, 496, 500, 620, 616, 775, 778, 823, 826, 838, 835, 877, 880, 947, 950, 965, 968, 1055 and 1058.
This is the first translation I do, sorry if it's too bad, please tell me what could be improved and what sounds weird.

I have some general questions regarding most lines:
-I don't know if I should delete the // at the beginning before sending the contribution.
-イケ and イキ both refer to "cum"?
-Should we take the liberty to add ~/!/... to add more emotion and expressiveness to the lines? I refer to those cases where it's not in the original written line

And I also made some notes about specific lines:
-316: I put slowly for だんだん, I also considered step by step or little by little but it sounds too long for me, what do you think?
-388: Do you keep the "(初絶頂)" too in the translation or is it unnecessary?
-620: I'm not sure about 想い, I used "love" for the context, tell me if there is a better word
-823: Is ジンジン a subject (throbbing) who する (rubs) inside? I interpreted it as two sensations that are happening at the same time, but the literal translation refers to the former.
-838: 私が君を= the literal translation of this is very confusing, is it "I am with You" or is it something like "Are we together"?
-835: I had a hard time phrasing this sentence because of the "?" connotation, not sure if it's grammatically correct, please check this one
-880: I wrote "ah" to keep the っ, tell me if there is a more accurate expression
-965: I'm not sure if "intimately" keeps the meaning of the original, what would you write instead?
-968: Here I was not sure if 敏感 was a feeling as in "it's sensitive" or if it was a subject "sensitive place", I went with the latter.
Contribution to some H-lines of personality c00
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You need to uncomment the translated lines, otherwise they won't be used. (remove the //)

Removed the // of all the lines that were translated and the ~ symbols. Added ShadowTsuki's corrections too.
Lines 1058, 838, 823 and 320 still need to be decided.
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Cleaned up a little and added my own suggestions to the lines we were a little stuck on.
Think its good enough for a merge.

Everything looks fine for me, I just changed the line 823 to ShadowTsuki's suggestion.
@ManlyMarco ManlyMarco merged commit b268db1 into IllusionMods:master Mar 19, 2021
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