Release notes sections refactor

administrator-manual/en/release_notes.rst

@@ -5,48 +5,48 @@ Release notes
 Changes
 =======
 
-* Following sections has been removed from interactive installer:
-  root password, filesystem encryption, keyboard selection, time zone selection.
-  See :ref:`installation-interactive` and :ref:`installation-unattended`.
-  These options can now be configured using the *First
-  Configuration wizard*.
+* At first login after system installation, the server-manager displays a *First
+  Configuration wizard*, where the administrator ("root" user) can set its password, change
+  the host name, select the timezone and tune other security related settings.
 
-* New packages installed by default: bind-utils, traceroute, tmpwatch.
-
-* After system installation, the server-manager shows the *First
-  Configuration wizard*, where the admin can set the password, change
-  the host name and so on.
-
-* The :guilabel:`Remote access` page has been removed. Access to the
-  *server-manager* is now controlled from :guilabel:`Network services`
-  page, service :guilabel:`httpd-admin`.
-
-* Secure Shell (SSH) access is configured from the new :guilabel:`SSH`
-  page.
-
 * The :guilabel:`Package manager` page has been renamed
   :guilabel:`Software center`, and moved to the *Administration*
-  category.  To enhance the page usability, now two separate tabs show
+  section.  To enhance the page usability, two separate tabs show
   respectively *Available* and *Installed* modules.  It is now possible
-  to update the installed packages, and read the updates changelog.
+  to update the installed packages and read the updates changelog.
 
-* The new page, :guilabel:`Server certificate` shows the self-signed
+* A new page, :guilabel:`Server certificate` shows the self-signed
   SSL certificate and allows generating a new one, customizing also
-  the *alternative names* of the server.  As consequence, changing the
+  the *alternative names* of the server.  As a consequence, changing the
   host name from the :guilabel:`Server name` page does not generate a
   new SSL certificate any more.  The same applies for the
   :guilabel:`Organization contacts`.
 
-* Added phone home to collect usage statistic. Phone home is disabled
+* Added :ref:`phonehome-section` to collect limited usage statistics. Phone home is disabled
   by default.
 
+* The :guilabel:`Remote access` page has been removed. Access to the
+  *server-manager* is now controlled from :guilabel:`Network services`
+  page, service :guilabel:`httpd-admin`.
+
+* Secure Shell (SSH) access is configured from the new :guilabel:`SSH`
+  page.
+
+* The following sections has been removed from interactive installer:
+  root password, filesystem encryption, keyboard selection, time zone selection.
+  See :ref:`installation-interactive` and :ref:`installation-unattended`.
+  These options can now be configured using the *First
+  Configuration wizard*.
+
+* Some new packages are installed by default to help troubleshooting: bind-utils, traceroute, tmpwatch.
+
 * If ``nethserver-mail-filter`` and ``nethserver-firewall-base`` are both installed 
   (gateway mode), port 25 is blocked from green and blue zones. See :ref:`email-port25`.
 
 Upgrading from 6.5
 ==================
 
-The system upgrade can be done using the shell.
+The system upgrade should be started from the command line shell.
 
 Make sure the system is fully updated: ::
 
@@ -56,4 +56,4 @@ Then, start the upgrade: ::
 
   yum update --releasever=6.6
 
-At the end, reboot the system.
+Then, reboot the system.