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"System Configuration" label & dynamic release string, "Why OpenIndiana and illumos?" paragraph #10

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@Mno-hime Mno-hime commented Dec 3, 2018

Paragraph based on @alarcher's Phoronix forum post.

Other language pages weren't updated.

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Mno-hime commented Dec 3, 2018

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pyhalov commented Dec 3, 2018

@Mno-hime Can you find some native speaker to read out text? Also, what are we going to do with current translations?

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Mno-hime commented Dec 4, 2018

Email sent to -discuss about the English text. I also asked for other native language speakers' help. But I think we should ship the updated English text regardless the availability of updated translations, once the English text is deemed OK.

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Saw a request for review on the mailing list. I'm a native English-speaker, so I've suggested some minor changes; some are technical, others colloquial.


<h2>Welcome to OpenIndiana Hipster!</h2>

<p>OpenIndiana is an illumos based Unix-like distribution derived from OpenSolaris.
Constructed as a general purpose operating system with enterprise class features, OpenIndiana Hipster is developed by the community, and for the community.</p>
<p>OpenIndiana is an illumos based Unix distribution derived from OpenSolaris.

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<p>OpenIndiana is an illumos based Unix distribution derived from OpenSolaris.
<p>OpenIndiana is an illumos-based Unix distribution derived from OpenSolaris.

<p>OpenIndiana is an illumos based Unix-like distribution derived from OpenSolaris.
Constructed as a general purpose operating system with enterprise class features, OpenIndiana Hipster is developed by the community, and for the community.</p>
<p>OpenIndiana is an illumos based Unix distribution derived from OpenSolaris.
Engineered as a general-purpose operating system with enterprise-class features,

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Engineered as a general-purpose operating system with enterprise-class features,
Engineered as a general purpose operating system with enterprise-class features,

<p>OpenIndiana obtains its name from Project Indiana, an open source effort by Sun Microsystems (now Oracle Corporation) to produce OpenSolaris, a community developed Unix-like distribution based on Sun Solaris.
Project Indiana was led by Ian Murdock, founder of the Debian Linux Distribution.</p>
<p>OpenIndiana obtains its name from Project Indiana, an open source effort
by Sun Microsystems (now Oracle Corporation) to produce OpenSolaris, a community

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by Sun Microsystems (now Oracle Corporation) to produce OpenSolaris, a community
by Sun Microsystems (now Oracle Corporation) to produce OpenSolaris, a community-developed

Project Indiana was led by Ian Murdock, founder of the Debian Linux Distribution.</p>
<p>OpenIndiana obtains its name from Project Indiana, an open source effort
by Sun Microsystems (now Oracle Corporation) to produce OpenSolaris, a community
developed Unix distribution based on Sun Solaris. Project Indiana was led by

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developed Unix distribution based on Sun Solaris. Project Indiana was led by
Unix distribution based on Sun Solaris. Project Indiana was led by

<tr>
<td><a href="https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/ZFS">ZFS</a></td>
<td>File System and Volume Manager</td>
<td>Copy-on-write file system and logical volume manager with extensive data corruption protection, high storage capacities support, efficient data compression, snapshots, and more</td>

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<td>Copy-on-write file system and logical volume manager with extensive data corruption protection, high storage capacities support, efficient data compression, snapshots, and more</td>
<td>Copy-on-write file system and logical volume manager with extensive data corruption protection, high storage capacity support, efficient data compression, snapshots, and more</td>

in Zones are updated as well, or, at minimum, are kept in a coherent state.</li><br>
<li>System utilities like <tt>pgrep</tt>, <tt>pkill</tt>, <tt>ps</tt>, <tt>ptree</tt>, <tt>svcprop</tt>,
and <tt>ipmon</tt> have <tt>-z</tt> option, which enables them to operate on a particular Zone without the need
to login to the Zone first.</li><br>

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to login to the Zone first.</li><br>
to log in to the Zone first.</li><br>


<a href="https://wiki.openindiana.org/oi/Release+Notes">https://wiki.openindiana.org/oi/Release+Notes</a>
<p>Considering the cross-pollination of technologies with FreeBSD and Linux, our code-base
had contributed in a notable extent to operating system's innovation. Hence we still strive

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had contributed in a notable extent to operating system's innovation. Hence we still strive
has made significant contributions to operating system innovation. We continue to strive

Currently build servers, hosting and bandwidth is donated by EveryCity hosting in the UK.</p>

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<h2>Getting Involved</h2>

<p>Our success as a distribution depends upon the success of our community, which is why we would like to invite all those interested in the future of OpenIndiana to participate and get involved!</p>
<p>Because our success as a operating system distribution depends upon the success of our community,

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<p>Because our success as a operating system distribution depends upon the success of our community,
<p>Our success as an operating system distribution depends upon the success of our community.

Currently build servers, hosting and bandwidth is donated by EveryCity hosting in the UK.</p>

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<h2>Getting Involved</h2>

<p>Our success as a distribution depends upon the success of our community, which is why we would like to invite all those interested in the future of OpenIndiana to participate and get involved!</p>
<p>Because our success as a operating system distribution depends upon the success of our community,
please, feel welcome in our mailing lists, IRC channels, and GitHub projects.</p>

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please, feel welcome in our mailing lists, IRC channels, and GitHub projects.</p>
We want all contributors and users to feel welcome in our mailing lists, IRC channels, and GitHub projects.</p>

<li>For end users we have publicly available IPS repositories for updating your installation with the latest software and security fixes.</li>
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<p>Developers can instantly leverage <a href="https://app.vagrantup.com/openindiana/boxes/hipster">OpenIndiana Vagrant box</a>
on Linux, Microsoft Windows, and Apple macOS via VirtualBox.</p>

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on Linux, Microsoft Windows, and Apple macOS via VirtualBox.</p>
on Linux, Microsoft Windows, and Apple macOS with VirtualBox.</p>

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