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                 Dear Councillor Malik,
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-                We are residents of Spadina-FortYork and want to bring your attention to the June Callwood kids' section park right next to the Bentway. We created this webpage with photos of the park to showcase that while every other kids' park in the vicinity has a fence around it, this one does not. We are not unsure why fence was not put up in the first place but it has been raised within the parents who meet outside that a fence is necessary for anywhere there are kids.
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+                We are residents of Fort York and want to bring your attention to the June Callwood kids' section park right next to the Bentway. We created this webpage with photos of the park to showcase that while every other kids' park in the vicinity has a fence around it, this one does not. We are not sure why a fence was not put up in the first place because as you can see in the pictures below, there are roads on all four sides of this park. This is a huge safety issue for the kids who play in this park.
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                 As you can see in the pictures, there are roads on all four sides of this park.
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-                This makes the situation of this park in uniquely risky place.
+                We would like to initiate a discussion on how to add a fence to this park. Some of the concerns in this park are:
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-                We would like to initiate a discussion on how to add a fencing to this park. We see parents from aroud the Spadina-FortYork area all the time who come here and have the same concerns. Some of the concerns in this park are:
+                - Traffic - Some of the kids who play here are small enough to not have yet learned the risk associated with roads and traffic safety.
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-                - Concern about traffic and accidents. Kids need to plan and run around and some are small enough to not have yet learned the risk associated with roads and traffic safety.
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-                - Some dog owners around this area access the park sometimes and hygeiene has been an issue in the past. 
+                - Dog owners regularly use this park, often without a leash. While most clean up after their dogs, hygiene still has been an issue.
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-            <img src="./img/fort-york-kids-park-photo-1.png" alt="Fort York Kids' Park Photo"  />
+            <img src="./img/fort-york-kids-park-photo-1.png" alt="June Callwood Fort York Kids' Park Photo"  />
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+            <img src="./img/fort-york-kids-park-photo-2.png" alt="June Callwood Fort York Kids' Park Photo" />
 
-            <img src="./img/fort-york-kids-park-photo-2.png" alt="Fort York Kids' Park Photo" />
+            <img src="./img/fort-york-kids-park-photo-3.png" alt="June Callwood Fort York Kids' Park Photo"  />
 
-            <img src="./img/fort-york-kids-park-photo-3.png" alt="Fort York Kids' Park Photo"  />
+            <img src="./img/fort-york-kids-park-photo-4.png" alt="June Callwood Fort York Kids' Park Photo" />
 
-            <img src="./img/fort-york-kids-park-photo-4.png" alt="Fort York Kids' Park Photo" />
+            <img src="./img/fort-york-kids-park-photo-5.png" alt="June Callwood Fort York Kids' Park Photo" />
 
-            <img src="./img/fort-york-kids-park-photo-5.png" alt="Fort York Kids' Park Photo" />
+            <img src="./img/map-june-callwood.png" alt="June Callwood park Toronto map" />
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