need team eyes/blessing on new opennews blurb

[kissane]

This is now at the top of the homepage, so I want to explicitly request a team review on it:

OpenNews is a joint project of Mozilla and the Knight Foundation dedicated to helping journalism thrive on the open web by supporting the international community of developers, designers, and data journalists in newsrooms.

Note: I'm using "joint project" instead of "partnership" because although the latter is accurate, it's a weird as the main noun defining OpenNews.

[erikao]

questions that jump out at me:

international (as a defining part of the program description) y/n?

and, newsrooms seems a little narrow. possible edits:

• in journalism (though that says journalism twice in one sentence)
• in and around journalism (clunky)

[kissane]

OpenNews is a joint project of Mozilla and the Knight Foundation dedicated to helping journalism thrive on the open web by supporting the community of developers, designers, and data journalists in and around newsrooms.

?

[ryanpitts]

how about just in and around newsrooms

[ryanpitts]

"OpenNews is a joint project of Mozilla and the Knight Foundation that helps journalism thrive on the open web by supporting the community of developers, designers, and data journalists."

[dansinker]

OpenNews is a joint project of Mozilla and the Knight Foundation that helps journalism thrive on the open web by supporting the vibrant community of developers, designers, and data journalists.

or some other adjective

?

[ryanpitts]

"growing" maybe feels like the expected word, but it is also a true word

[kissane]

I will admit that I added and then removed "vibrant" days ago because it felt a little copywriting-y. "Growing" seems accurate and good, if expected.

It's a little conceptually weird to not have anything after "developers, designers, and data journalists" though, right? Because we're not supporting all developers and designers. I mean, no one will be confused, but if this is gonna be front and center, I want to make it as watertight as possible.

What about:

OpenNews is a joint project of Mozilla and the Knight Foundation that helps journalism thrive on the open web by supporting the vibrant community of news developers and data journalists.

[ryanpitts]

I like how tight that is. I still think "vibrant" maybe sounds copywrite-y though :/

[dansinker]

I'm OK with "growing"

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I like how tight that is. I still think "vibrant" maybe sounds copywrite-y
though :/

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[erikao]

i also like how tight that is, but...
do we care about
losing designer as a separate group from developer?
AND
the fact that data journalist is super broad and can mean excel driven reporting?

[kissane]

Oh god, "vibrant" was all cold pills, I meant to write "growing."

We don't really talk much about designers on the site now, so IDK—I liked having it in, but I dunno if I care about losing it. I feel more strongly that it's cool to go big-tent with the data journalists, since a ton of the Source Learning stuff is super helpful for even the CAR-iest people.

[kissane]

More:

OpenNews is a joint project of Mozilla and the Knight Foundation that helps journalism thrive on the open web by supporting the growing community of news developers, designers, and data-wranglers.

or

OpenNews is a joint project of Mozilla and the Knight Foundation that helps journalism thrive on the open web by supporting developers, designers, and data nerds in and around newsrooms.

[dansinker]

I like the "growing community" version, will integrate.

[dansinker]

this is blessed and added in #223. closing.