Consolidate connection ID negotiation section with prior text #1888
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The text here was mostly good, and I believe that this is a good place for that text. However, some of the text was expository in nature, and I moved that up to the connection ID definition section. There is some new stuff in there, mostly just to point forward to the negotiation section.
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| Packets with short headers ({{short-header}}) only include the Destination | ||
| Connection ID and omit the explicit length. The length of the Destination | ||
| Connection ID field is expected to be known to endpoints. Endpoints using a | ||
| connection-ID based load balancer could agree with the load balancer on a fixed |
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connection-ID -> Connection ID
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I think what was meant here is "Connection ID-based load balancer" (dash between ID and based). This would look odd because Connection ID is two words. This can be reworded as "using a load balancer based on Connection IDs."
| Packets with short headers ({{short-header}}) only include the Destination | ||
| Connection ID and omit the explicit length. The length of the Destination | ||
| Connection ID field is expected to be known to endpoints. Endpoints that use a | ||
| load balancer that routes based on connection ID could agree with the load |
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Run on sentence ("that ... that"). I prefer the earlier construction: "Endpoints using a connection-ID based load balancer could agree with the load balancer on a fixed or minimum length and on an encoding for connection IDs."
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It has all the problems already highlighted, plus the precedence of the "or" and "and" toward the end is unclear. I've tweaked again.
The text here was mostly good, and I believe that this is a good place
for that text. However, some of the text was expository in nature, and
I moved that up to the connection ID definition section. There is some
new stuff in there, mostly just to point forward to the negotiation
section.