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Signed-off-by: Donny Yung <donaldyung@datawire.io>

reference/intercepts.md

@@ -42,10 +42,10 @@ Telepresence can import the environment variables from the pod that is being int
 
 ## Creating an intercept without a local process running
 
-If you are *are* logged into Ambassador Cloud, when you create an intercept the Traffic
-Agent does a GET request to your service and the process running on your local machine
-at the port specified in your intercept to determine if they support HTTP/2. This is
-required for the selective intercepts to behave correctly.
+The Traffic Agent sends a GET request to your service and the process running on your
+local machine at the port specified in your intercept to determine if they support HTTP/2,
+if you *are* logged into Ambassador Cloud. This is required for selective intercepts to
+behave correctly.
 
 If you do not have a service running locally, the Traffic Agent will use the result
 it gets from the HTTP check against your app in the cluster to configure requests

releaseNotes.yml

@@ -38,10 +38,9 @@ items:
       - type: bugfix
         title: Better UX around intercepts with no local process running
         body: >-
-          When initiating an intercept before you have a local process running,
-          it would result in requests hanging indefinitely.  This has been fixed
-          and will result in an <code>Empty reply from server</code> until you
-          start a local process.
+          Requests would hang indefinitely when initiating an intercept before you
+          had a local process running. This has been fixed and will result in an
+          <code>Empty reply from server</code> until you start a local process.
         docs: reference/intercepts
 
   - version: 2.3.6