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 Not all data are the same: there are varying degrees of sensitivity. In most jurisdictions, the law accounts for the protection of sensitive data, particularly personal data. But can we rely on privacy laws to ensure responsible use of data? Perhaps more importantly, does the law determine what is considered responsible?
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-Earlier this year, when the world was engulfed by the first wave of COVID-19, governments across the world turned to data specialists for help. Seeing as COVID-19 is highly contagious, scientists have advised policies that ensure (social) isolation of COVID-19 patients. As a measure to control further transmission of the virus, many countries therefore prioritised the identification and location of these patients. The approach towards this policy varied. By April, China, Israel, Poland, Singapore, South Korea and Japan invited or legally obliged citizens to use track and trace COVID-19 apps. The apps give government institutions (indeterminate) access to the users’ personal location data and record users’ potential COVID-19 symptoms. The level of intrusion varies per app, but even the most “innocent” apps clearly hold sensitive information as personal location data is, by definition, sensitive.
+During the first wave of COVID-19 pandemic, governments across the world turned to data specialists for help. Seeing as COVID-19 is highly contagious, scientists have advised policies that ensure (social) isolation of COVID-19 patients. As a measure to control further transmission of the virus, many countries prioritised the identification and location of these patients. The approach towards this policy varied. Some governments, e.g., in China, Israel, Poland, Singapore, South Korea, and Japan invited or legally obliged citizens to use track and trace COVID-19 apps. The apps give government institutions (indeterminate) access to the users’ personal location data and record their potential COVID-19 symptoms. The level of intrusion varies per app, but all of them hold sensitive information as personal location data are, by definition, sensitive.
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-Not only governments are relying on these ‘tracking’ apps. Private entities have been acquiring both real time- and non-real time location information for years. However, as the technology improves, the distance between its application and the societal impact grows. Location data has become a commodity. It is in high demand and profitable, but at which cost? And who pays the price? A commoditization of location data has the potential to benefit society, but that requires strong legal or communal pressure. Pressure to collect, process, visualise, use and remove the data in a responsible way. So, where should this pressure come from? Legislation? Companies relying on location data? Ethical officers employed by these companies?
+Not only governments are relying on these tracking apps. Private entities have been acquiring both real time- and non-real time location information for years. However, as the technology improves, the relationship between its application and the societal impact changes. Location data have become a commodity. They are in high demand and profitable, but at which cost? And who pays the price? A commoditization of location data has the potential to benefit society, but that requires strong legal or communal pressure. Pressure to collect, process, visualise, use, and remove the data in a responsible way. So, where should this pressure come from? Legislation? Companies relying on location data? Ethical officers employed by these companies?
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-Every role or function that interacts with location data has a responsibility to show ethical leadership. That is the only way to incorporate ethics by design into the entire project/process. Based on panel discussions, webinars and workshops about this topic, it is evident that the geospatial community is eager to show ethical leadership. The only question left is: How?
+Every role or function that interacts with location data has a responsibility to show ethical leadership. That is the only way to incorporate ethics by design into the entire project/process. Based on panel discussions, webinars, and workshops about this topic, it is evident that the geospatial community is eager to show ethical leadership. The only question left is: How?
 
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