Edit ingame dialog

src/stages/stage1.c

@@ -22,13 +22,15 @@ Dialog *stage1_dialog() {
 		dadd_msg(d, Left, "It's me!");
 	else
 		dadd_msg(d, Left, "Just someone?");
-	dadd_msg(d, Right, "How dare you pass the lake of the fairies!\nIt's a dangerous area for weak humans!");
+
+	dadd_msg(d, Right, "How dare you pass the lake of the fairies?!\nIt's a dangerous place for weak humans!");
+
 	if(global.plr.cha == Marisa) {
 		dadd_msg(d, Left, "You call me weak?");
-		dadd_msg(d, Right, "Yes!");
+		dadd_msg(d, Right, "I do!");
 	} else {
-		dadd_msg(d, Left, "I'm just walking by. Any problem with that?");
-		dadd_msg(d, Right, "Of course! It's not right!");
+		dadd_msg(d, Left, "I'm just passing by. Any problem with that?");
+		dadd_msg(d, Right, "Of course! You can't do that!");
 	}
 
 	dadd_msg(d, Right, "I'll just freeze you!");

src/stages/stage2_events.c

@@ -18,16 +18,16 @@ Dialog *stage2_dialog() {
 		dadd_msg(d, Right, "Huh? No, you? Everone is upset, you know?\nSo I came too.");
 		dadd_msg(d, Left, "Why, what happened?");
 		dadd_msg(d, Right, "The border has been broken.");
-		dadd_msg(d, Left, "Is that even possible!?");
+		dadd_msg(d, Left, "Is that even possible?!");
 		dadd_msg(d, Right, "Look, there is a way outside\nright behind us.");
-		dadd_msg(d, Left, "But I have the feeling that you\n won't let me pass, haha");
+		dadd_msg(d, Left, "But I've got the feeling that you\n won't let me pass, haha");
 	} else {
-		dadd_msg(d, Left, "This must be the place ...");
+		dadd_msg(d, Left, "This must be the place...");
 		dadd_msg(d, Right, "Hello? ");
 		dadd_msg(d, Left, "You came here because of the\n\"crack\", too? Where is it?");
-		dadd_msg(d, Right, "Right behind us, but ...");
+		dadd_msg(d, Right, "Right behind us, but...");
 		dadd_msg(d, Left, "Ok, I'll go there.");
-		dadd_msg(d, Right, "No! Don't make it more of a\ntrouble than it already is!");
+		dadd_msg(d, Right, "No! Don't make it more\ntroubling than it already is!");
 	}
 
 	return d;

src/stages/stage3_events.c

@@ -14,9 +14,9 @@
 Dialog *stage3_dialog() {
 	Dialog *d = create_dialog(global.plr.cha == Marisa ? "dialog/marisa" : "dialog/youmu", "masterspark");
 
-	dadd_msg(d, Left, "Ugh, it's like bugs being attracted\nby the light ...");
-	dadd_msg(d, Right, "Yes! Because the light makes us strong!");
-	dadd_msg(d, Right, "This place is full of it! So feel my tremendous power!");
+	dadd_msg(d, Left, "Ugh, it's like bugs being attracted by the light...");
+	dadd_msg(d, Right, "That's right! The light makes us strong!");
+	dadd_msg(d, Right, "This place is full of it, so feel my tremendous power!");
 
 	return d;
 }

src/stages/stage4_events.c

@@ -17,18 +17,18 @@ Dialog *stage4_dialog() {
 	dadd_msg(d, Right, "Ah! Intruder! Stop being so persistent!");
 
 	if(global.plr.cha == Marisa) {
-		dadd_msg(d, Left, "What? I mean where am I?");
-		dadd_msg(d, Right, "You are in the ...");
-		dadd_msg(d, Right, "STOP! That's secret for intruders!");
-		dadd_msg(d, Left, "... in the mansion of the\nevil mastermind, right?");
+		dadd_msg(d, Left, "What? I mean, where am I?");
+		dadd_msg(d, Right, "You are in the...");
+		dadd_msg(d, Right, "STOP! I won't tell that to intruders!");
+		dadd_msg(d, Left, "...in the mansion of the\nevil mastermind, right?");
 		dadd_msg(d, Right, "AHH! Anyway! You won't reach\nthe end of this corridor!");
 	} else {
 		dadd_msg(d, Left, "So you are the owner of this place?");
 		dadd_msg(d, Right, "No, I'm just the guard!");
 		dadd_msg(d, Left, "What is there to be guarded?");
-		dadd_msg(d, Right, "My master ... I mean that's a secret!");
+		dadd_msg(d, Right, "My master... I mean, that's a secret!");
 		dadd_msg(d, Left, "...");
-		dadd_msg(d, Right, "So stop asking questions!\nSecrets are secrets!\n ... and I will beat you now!");
+		dadd_msg(d, Right, "So stop asking questions!\nSecrets are secret!\n...\nAnd I will beat you now!");
 	}
 
 	return d;
@@ -37,8 +37,8 @@ Dialog *stage4_dialog() {
 Dialog *stage4_dialog_end() {
 	Dialog *d = create_dialog(global.plr.cha == Marisa ? "dialog/marisa" : "dialog/youmu", "masterspark");
 
-	dadd_msg(d, Left, "Where is your master now?");
-	dadd_msg(d, Right, "Didn't I say? At the end of this corridor,\nthere is a door.");
+	dadd_msg(d, Left, "Now, where is your master?");
+	dadd_msg(d, Right, "Didn't I tell you? At the end of this corridor,\nthere is a door.");
 	dadd_msg(d, Right, "Just leave me alone.");
 
 	return d;

src/stages/stage5_events.c

@@ -25,7 +25,7 @@ Dialog *stage5_boss_dialog() {
 	dadd_msg(d, Left, "Why? You aren't involved in this, are you?");
 	dadd_msg(d, Right, "I don't have time for your suspicions now.");
 	dadd_msg(d, Left, "Sounds very suspicious, actually.");
-	dadd_msg(d, Right, "Ok, let's finish this quickly.");	
+	dadd_msg(d, Right, "Ok, let's finish this quickly.");
 
 	return d;
 }

src/stages/stage6_events.c

@@ -13,24 +13,24 @@ Dialog *stage6_dialog() {
 	Dialog *d = create_dialog(global.plr.cha == Marisa ? "dialog/marisa" : "dialog/youmu", "masterspark");
 
 	dadd_msg(d, Left, "You are responsible?");
-	dadd_msg(d, Right, "Yes ...");
+	dadd_msg(d, Right, "Yes...");
 
 	if(global.plr.cha == Marisa) {
 		dadd_msg(d, Left, "I'll masterspark you now.");
-		dadd_msg(d, Right, "What? Why do you want to fight?\nDo you even understand, what I did here?");
-		dadd_msg(d, Left, "I understand it's a huge mess! Cracking\nthe border, a giant mansion, a giant tower ...");
+		dadd_msg(d, Right, "What? Why do you want to fight?\nDo you even understand what I did here?");
+		dadd_msg(d, Left, "I understand that it's a huge mess!\nCracking the border, a giant mansion, a giant tower...");
 		dadd_msg(d, Left, "At first I was curious. But now\nI just want to finish this! Seriously.");
 	} else {
 		dadd_msg(d, Left, "How did you manage to do all of this?");
-		dadd_msg(d, Right, "A kind person granted me an unknown power.\nAnd thanks to that I was able\nto create this little place for myself.");
+		dadd_msg(d, Right, "A kind person granted me an unknown power,\nand thanks to that I was able to\ncreate this little place for myself.");
 		dadd_msg(d, Left, "Why did you create *this* place for yourself?");
-		dadd_msg(d, Right, "Because it is great for research!\nAnd it's almost done! Just a matter of moments ...");
+		dadd_msg(d, Right, "Because it is great for research!\nAnd it's almost done! Just a matter of moments...");
 		dadd_msg(d, Right, "And the true potential of my power will be\nunleashed!");
-		dadd_msg(d, Left, "That means ...\nI'll better finish you off quickly?");
+		dadd_msg(d, Left, "That means...\nI'll better finish you off quickly?");
 	}
 
 	dadd_msg(d, Right, "Why do you have to be so ignorant?");
-	dadd_msg(d, Right, "... sorry, this is more important than you!");
+	dadd_msg(d, Right, "...\nSorry, this is more important than you!");
 
 	return d;
 }