Implement Ian's suggested changes to the charter.

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-    <title>[DRAFT] Verifiable Claims Working Group</title>
+    <title>[EDITOR'S DRAFT] Verifiable Claims Working Group</title>
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@@ -53,7 +53,7 @@
                                                   alt="Technology and Society Domain"/></a>
     </p>
 
-    <h1 id="title">[DRAFT] Verifiable Claims Working Group Charter</h1>
+    <h1 id="title">[EDITOR'S DRAFT] Verifiable Claims Working Group Charter</h1>
 
         <p class="mission">The mission of the Verifiable Claims Working Group is to make expressing, exchanging, and verifying claims easier and more secure on the Web.</p>
 
@@ -134,22 +134,31 @@ <h2 id="problem">Problem Statement</h2>
 
     <h2 id="goals">Goals</h2>
 
-   <p>
-Research into this problem was performed by the
-<a href="https://www.w3.org/Payments/IG/">Web Payments Interest Group</a>
-via the
-<a href="http://w3c.github.io/vctf/">Verifiable Claims Task Force</a>.
-The research findings can be found in the
-<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1dYup3KC2nak3LVTzyapr996TKxDj1w5Eyp4g13rQQBA/edit">Verifiable Claims Task Force Final Report</a>.
-The findings suggest that there is consensus to address a
-@@@narrow set of use cases@@@ around the data model and syntax(es) for
-expressing verifiable claims as well as an analysis of how the data model
-and syntax(es) could be combined with existing technology to address the
-problems listed above.
-   </p>
+  <p>
+In order to make expressing, exchanging, and verifying claims easier and
+more secure on the Web, this group will:
+  </p>
+
+  <ul>
+    <li>
+Recommend a data model for expressing verifiable claims.
+    </li>
+    <li>
+Recommend one or more syntaxes for expressing the verifiable claims data model.
+    </li>
+    <li>
+Analyze how the verifiable claims data model and syntaxes can 1) be
+integrated into current attribute exchange protocols, and/or 2) be deployed
+via minor modifications to existing attribute exchange protocols, and/or 3)
+recommend that a new attribute exchange protocol is necessary to
+sufficiently address the Problem Statement.
+    </li>
+  </ul>
 
    <p>
 For more background information about this group, please see @@@the FAQ@@@.
+There are also <a href="../use-cases/">a set of focused use cases</a> that
+are suggested as input to the group.
    </p>
 
     <div class="scope">
@@ -400,15 +409,25 @@ <h2 id="licensing">Licensing</h2>
 
     <h2 id="about">About this Charter</h2>
 
+   <p>
+Research that went into the creation of this charter was performed by the
+<a href="https://www.w3.org/Payments/IG/">Web Payments Interest Group</a>
+via the
+<a href="http://w3c.github.io/vctf/">Verifiable Claims Task Force</a>.
+The research findings can be found in the
+<a href="VCTF-final-report.html">Verifiable Claims Task Force Final Report</a>.
+
+The Web Payments Interest Group recommended that the Task Force draft a
+charter to determine whether there is consensus within the community
+(including those interviewed) for the scope of work.
+   </p>
+
+
     <p>This charter for the Verifiable Claims Working Group has been created according to <a
             href="/Consortium/Process/groups#GAGeneral">section 5.2</a> of the <a href="/Consortium/Process">Process
         Document</a>. In the event of a conflict between this document or the provisions of any charter and the W3C
       Process, the W3C Process shall take precedence.</p>
 
-    <p>Development of this charter was supported in part by the
-    European Union's 7th Research Framework Programme (FP7/ 2013-2015)
-      under grant agreement nº611327 - HTML5 Apps.</p>
-
       <hr/>
     <address>Participants of the Verifiable Claims Interest Group<br/>
       See the <a href="http://w3c.github.io/webpayments-ig/latest/charters/payments-wg-charter.html">the Editor's Draft of the charter</a>.