Objectives: one more iteration. Please proofread!

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   \textbf{free public distributed collaborative services} tightly integrated
   into the European Open Science Cloud (EOSC),
   in collaboration with a federation of related services
-  operated by the wider Jupyter community.
+  operated by the wider community.
 
-\item Demonstrate the value, versatility of such services through
-  \textbf{innovative tailored applications} in a variety of disciplines and
+\item Demonstrate the value and versatility of such services through
+  \textbf{innovative co-designed tailored applications} in a variety of disciplines and
   contexts.
 
 \item \textbf{Support Open Science} and maximize impact through development and
@@ -76,20 +76,19 @@
   \textbf{Infrastructure and services for Jupyter on EOSC} ---
   Contribute a distributed infrastructure to the European Open Science Cloud
   (EOSC) and the wider Open Science community that can be tailored to
-  provide a multitude of generic or specialized services to facilitate
+  provide a multitude of generic or specialized services that facilitates
   open science in a \textbf{wide range of scientific domains} and projects.
   This infrastructure will build on the Jupyter project and ecosystem,
   taking the form of a federation of JupyterHub/Binder instances,
-  tightly integrated into the EOSC-Hub,
-  and improvements to the ecosystem of Jupyter deployment tools.
-  The federation will include and encourage instances operated by
+  tightly integrated into the EOSC-Hub.
+  To maximize \textbf{impact, outreach, and sustainability},
+  the federation will include and encourage instances operated by
   external partners, whether free or non free, public or private,
-  general purpose or custom built for specific needs
-  with access to specialized or large data sets,
-  all from the same toolbox,
-  which \textbf{fosters interoperability and re-use},
-  maximising impact,
-  and extending beyond the Jupyter ecosystem.
+  general purpose or custom built for specific needs -- e.g.
+  providing access to specialized or large data sets, or specific hardware.
+  This objective will be supported by improvements to the Jupyter
+  deployment toolbox which fosters \textbf{reuse and interoperability
+    beyond the Jupyter ecosystem}.
 
 \item \label{obj:interactivity}
   \textbf{Improving interactive computing} ---
@@ -103,21 +102,21 @@
   such as interactive C++.
   While Jupyter is already widely used,
   there are many areas
-  of interactive exploration that can be improved.
+  of interactive exploration that can be developed further.
 
 \item \label{obj:reusability}
   \textbf{Reproducibility and FAIR data} ---
   Extend facilities for
   \textbf{reproducibility of computational environments}
   and facilitating \textbf{FAIR data practices}.
   We will contribute to the recording and reproducibility
-  of environments with repo2docker and Binder
+  of environments with repo2docker and Binder,
   and extend capabilities to better support FAIR
   data requirements. In particular, the archival of execution
   environments to support re-usability of notebooks in the future
-  needs attention. Such notebooks may be published alongside
-  publication manuscripts to detail the computation of published data
-  and figures, to address the Re-usable requirement of FAIR data.
+  needs attention. Such notebooks may, for example, be published alongside
+  traditional publications to detail the computation of published data
+  and figures, and address the Re-usable requirement of FAIR data.
 
 \item \label{obj:demonstrators}
   \textbf{Demonstrators in science and education} ---
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   the services and underlying infrastructure by distributing its
   development, hosting, and maintenance over stakeholders from a
   variety of institutions and backgrounds,
-  from the private sector to public research and education
+  from the private sector to public research, education
   and open government.
 
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