Liberty S1: revise dialogue

data/campaigns/Liberty/scenarios/01_The_Raid.cfg

@@ -17,15 +17,25 @@
 
     [story]
         [part]
-            story= _ "In the Era of Turmoil, during the reign of King Garard II, the border towns of Delwyn and Dallben in the Province of Annuvin grew increasingly dissatisfied with the King’s rule. Being preoccupied with the great wars, the King was unable to send adequate forces to protect the frontier."
+            #po: Baldras is an old man from the country and both speaks and writes with many grammatical errors due to his relative lack of education
+            #po: He is also a little bit rude and grumpy, so languages with ruder or more informal variants of words should use those in most cases
+            story= _ "From the journal of Baldras, 501 YW
+
+Months... seven months it’s been since the Crown did send a single guard here to help us. This Garard II be a pompous stinker, worser than his father! Us of these border towns Delwyn and Dallben be already poor and needy, yet alls ‘His Majesty’ can thinks of is tax, tax, tax, making us pay even if we don’t technically be part of Wesnoth. And then he uses our gold to provoke more wars with more orcs and for what? Not care for peoples like us, no. Only getting more land for them grubby nobles to lord over more."
             background=story/frontier.jpg
         [/part]
         [part]
-            story= _ "Though untrained in wielding proper military weapons, the hardy people of the Western Marches were at home in the forests and swamps, and learned to use their simple slings and clubs to great effect. They established their own trading routes and pacts of mutual defense, quickly becoming self-reliant against the raiding orc hordes."
+            story= _ "To abbadon with the Crown! We gots no armies and we don’t even got real weapons, but we of the Western Marches use our slings and clubs good enough. In all Annuvin Province, there won’t be nobody besting us in these forests and swamps. We’re self-reliant out here. We gots our own trade routes and pacts of mutual defense. No need for them Wesnothians. Not a single bit."
             background=story/frontier.jpg
         [/part]
         [part]
-            story= _ "The people of Annuvin eventually established a form of independence, content with the lack of aid — or interference — from the King. Queen Asheviere, however, had other plans for her husband and the “ill-suited” self-rule of the countryfolk."
+            #po: Some languages, including Norwegian and Old English, don't
+            #po: have a single word for "uncle", dividing it into
+            #po: mother's-brother vs. father's-brother. Baldras is
+            #po: Harper's mother's brother. In some human societies,
+            #po: including the Navaho and Akan, this would give him a
+            #po: special responsibility for the boy.
+            story= _ "Sun was out today, but it was raining too. Weird mix of brightness and woe. Reminds me of that day Harper’s pa died in that orc raid. Since my sister died when he was young, poor lad had nobody left but me. Never wanted no kid of my own but... well, he’s mine to take care of now. Fine lad, that one, just a bit careless like his pa. I’ll needs to keep a good eye on him now, with all them orcs running round here of late."
             background=story/frontier.jpg
         [/part]
     [/story]
@@ -185,11 +195,11 @@
 
         [message]
             speaker=Fal Khag
-            message= _ "I long to burn human cities, but until our great chieftains provide us with sufficient forces we must look to these villagers to feed our wolves and slake the thirst of our blades."
+            message= _ "I long to burn human cities, but that weasley witch thinks we’re only good enough for these puny villages. Hapless clods have barely anything for us to take, but ‘least the witch’s gold is good."
         [/message]
         [message]
             speaker=Fal Khag
-            message= _ "Ride, you worms, I want to finish our raid before the hunting party returns to the human village."
+            message= _ "Ride, you worms! Let’s finish our raid before the hunting party returns to the human village."
         [/message]
 
         #Put the leader back and make some other good guys
@@ -242,80 +252,53 @@
         [/message]
         [message]
             speaker=Baldras
-            message= _ "We must stop them before they reach the village. Damn the crown, they have long since forgotten about us out here."
+            message= _ "We’ve gots to stop them or they’ll burn the whole village. Damn these goblins and damn the Crown. We always be havin’ to fight fer ourselves."
         [/message]
         [message]
             speaker=Harper
-            message= _ "That goblin leader is heading full-speed straight for Dallben. But we’ll need to chase them all down if we’re going to stop them."
+            # po: Harper has a bit of an accent, but not as much as his Uncle.
+            # po: Harper is a bit of a reckless kid as Baldras alludes to, but he's much more polite
+            message= _ "Uncle, we got no time to talk! Them riders are heading full-speed straight for Dallben. We’ll need to chase them down through those woods — and fast, or we won’t be able to catch up."
         [/message]
         [message]
             speaker=Baldras
-            message= _ "Do it. Try to hold them back until us old-timers can get there and finish them off."
+            message= _ "Do it. Hold them beasts back ‘til us old-timers gets there to finish ‘em off."
         [/message]
         [message]
             speaker=Baldras
-            #po: Some languages, including Norwegian and Old English, don't
-            #po: have a single word for "uncle", dividing it into
-            #po: mother's-brother vs. father's-brother. Baldras is
-            #po: Harper's mother's brother. In some human societies,
-            #po: including the Navaho and Akan, this would give him a
-            #po: special responsibility for the boy.
-            message= _ "And Harper... don’t get yourself killed. I’m responsible for you now that your father is gone, and I won’t dishonor his memory by breaking my promise to keep you safe."
+            message= _ "And Harper... don’t be getting reckless on me today. Yer father died like that, chargin’ stupidly into a pack of goblins by ‘imself. I won’t lose ya the same way."
         [/message]
         [message]
             speaker=Harper
-            message= _ "... I know... All right now, let’s stop these goblins!"
+            message= _ "I know, I know, no need to worry so much, Uncle. All right now, let’s stop these riders!"
         [/message]
     [/event]
 
-    # we set a flag on any side 1 death so that Harper doesn't comment on more
-    # having died today unless someone did
-    [event]
-        name=die
-
-        [filter]
-            side=1
-        [/filter]
-
-        {VARIABLE any_villagers_died yes}
-    [/event]
-
     #
     # Victory
     #
     [event]
         name=enemies defeated
 
         {CLEAR_VARIABLE town_guards_awakened}
-        [if]
-            [variable]
-                name=any_villagers_died
-                boolean_equals=yes
-            [/variable]
 
-            [then]
-                {CLEAR_VARIABLE any_villagers_died}
-                [message]
-                    speaker=Harper
-                    message= _ "We are barely able to survive these orc raids. We lost two men last week, more today... yet Weldyn does nothing!"
-                [/message]
-            [/then]
-
-            [else]
-                [message]
-                    speaker=Harper
-                    message= _ "We are barely able to survive these orc raids. We lost two men last week, more could have died today... yet Weldyn does nothing!"
-                [/message]
-            [/else]
-        [/if]
+        [message]
+            speaker=Harper
+            message= _ "These orc raids keep gettin’ harder and harder to hold off. Feels like every new day’s just another chance for us to lose everything..."
+        [/message]
         [message]
             speaker=Baldras
-            message= _ "The King stopped sending patrols out here once the war started. Once that happened, the burden fell to us. We are citizens of Wesnoth, and as long as her banner flies we will resist the horde."
+            message= _ "The King stopped sendin’ patrols out here a while back. Stinker probably started another war or somethin’. Don’t really matter. Technically Annuvin be under the charge of Elensefar, but you don’t see ‘em coming to help us either."
         [/message]
         [message]
             speaker=Harper
-            message= _ "The banner will fly over a ghost town if help does not come soon."
+            message= _ "Then why do we got to pay taxes to the King? Maybe Elensefar doesn’t help us, but ‘least they don’t take our gold."
         [/message]
+        [message]
+            speaker=Baldras
+            message= _ "I don’t know, Harper. I just don’t know. All I can say is we’re on our own out here."
+        [/message]
+
         [endlevel]
             result=victory
             bonus=yes
@@ -344,11 +327,11 @@
 
         [message]
             speaker=Harper
-            message= _ "They’re getting closer to our village! What about the town guards, can they help us?"
+            message= _ "They’re getting close to Dallben! What should we do?"
         [/message]
         [message]
             speaker=Baldras
-            message= _ "They’ll come out when they see those riders, or us, approaching, but there aren’t many of them... I wouldn’t count on them being able to protect the village alone for long."
+            message= _ "I left a couple guards in the village. Might be able to slow them wolves down if they gets closer."
         [/message]
     [/event]
 
@@ -378,18 +361,18 @@
                 [/message]
                 [message]
                     speaker=unit
-                    message= _ "Goblin riders on the hunt. We must not let any of them to the village!"
+                    message= _ "Goblin riders on the hunt, headed right for the village. We must stop them!"
                 [/message]
             [/then]
 
             [else]
                 [message]
                     speaker=Wolmas
-                    message= _ "Look! Goblin riders are on the hunt — and heading right for Dallben!"
+                    message= _ "Look! Goblin riders on the hunt, heading right for Dallben!"
                 [/message]
                 [message]
                     speaker=Remald
-                    message= _ "Halt!"
+                    message= _ "We’ve got to stop them!"
                 [/message]
             [/else]
         )}
@@ -408,24 +391,14 @@
             y=1-2
         [/filter]
         [message]
-            speaker=Baldras
-            message= _ "The goblins reached the village! There will surely be nothing left when they are done pillaging it."
+            speaker=Harper
+            message= _ "The goblins reached the village! Now there’ll be nothing left after they raid our homes. We failed..."
         [/message]
         [endlevel]
             result=defeat
         [/endlevel]
     [/event]
 
-    [event]
-        name=defeat
-
-        [message]
-            speaker=narrator
-            image=wesnoth-icon.png
-            message=_ "None remarked on the passing of the tiny, isolated frontier town. It was but a harbinger of the evil to come under the tyranny of Asheviere."
-        [/message]
-    [/event]
-
     {LIBERTY_DEATHS}
 [/scenario]